Personality profile comparison

Profile one's lead hooked my interest more. It was simple. I also like how they did not mention her name in the lead and waited to introduce her in the second paragraph.

The focus in profile one is about Mills' passion for photography: how it came to be, why she likes it. The focus of the second profile is about Esposito's passion for music and the surprising  relation to baseball.

I liked profile one better because the focus of the story was more concise. The story flowed much better than profile two. Every sentence felt contributed to understanding the foucs. Profile two was good, but I felt bounced back and forth too much between baseball and music.

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